tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4954305973478053503.post3473193343111286054..comments2024-01-09T05:41:03.488-07:00Comments on Debbie's Inkspectations: Romance Blogfest, Love At First Sight...Or Not So MuchDebbie Davishttp://www.blogger.com/profile/05327044979542154619noreply@blogger.comBlogger19125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4954305973478053503.post-7639937767922690602011-02-17T16:09:38.009-07:002011-02-17T16:09:38.009-07:00Love love LOVED this, Debbie! These were my person...Love love LOVED this, Debbie! These were my personal favorite lines:<br /><br />He deepened the kiss, pressing his lips more firmly on hers and held her body close to his. Her warmth radiated out to him, penetrating his clothes, alleviating the emptiness inside him as nothing else had in over a century of imprisonment, or even before that. <br /><br />You went for more than just the physical, into the kind of emotion that grabs my heart as she "alleviat[ed] the emptiness inside him..."<br /><br />Wow! Yeah, this is my kind of kiss. ;-)Joyce DiPastenahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16638031103659265422noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4954305973478053503.post-85684010074956572692011-02-17T13:53:35.185-07:002011-02-17T13:53:35.185-07:00Hey Debbie!
I really liked this! His sense of sur...Hey Debbie!<br /><br />I really liked this! His sense of surprise, the heightening emotion, the possession she causes in him. It makes me want to read on and see how this passion binds him, changes him.<br /><br />If I were to make suggestions, I would say to find all the sentences that say "was" and change them. They take me out of the immediacy of the action for a bit. A few is fine, but so many starts to feel heavy. Try that and see how it reads. Good job!Tamara Hart Heinerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07562765111202443160noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4954305973478053503.post-50742597534946964282011-02-17T10:08:21.530-07:002011-02-17T10:08:21.530-07:00Way to go, Debbie! I agree with Canda--that was my...Way to go, Debbie! I agree with Canda--that was my favorite line, too; makes me believe that we, mortals, can feel the same kind of passion--w/o superhuman traits!<br /><br />Well done!Maria Hoaglandhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01618827617012896159noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4954305973478053503.post-63529000346348297012011-02-16T11:35:22.527-07:002011-02-16T11:35:22.527-07:00Hey, Debbie! I have an award for you! :)Hey, Debbie! I have an <a href="http://elizabethmueller.blogspot.com/2011/02/and-winner-is-followed-up-with-awards.html" rel="nofollow">award</a> for you! :)Elizabeth Muellerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06028099814857743134noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4954305973478053503.post-52894134759682765582011-02-16T11:15:48.046-07:002011-02-16T11:15:48.046-07:00That's quite a kiss! I wasn't sure about t...That's quite a kiss! I wasn't sure about the paranormal aspect at first, but the passion combined with the comment, "Never in his entire existence as a mortal or immortal had he ever experienced anything like it," promised a very interesting future for the two of them. Thanks for taking part in the blogfest. It's been fun, hasn't it?<br /><br />Carol GarvinAnonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4954305973478053503.post-79619257365498810712011-02-15T22:00:12.980-07:002011-02-15T22:00:12.980-07:00Whoa, great description and emotional journey he e...Whoa, great description and emotional journey he experienced! Thank you for inviting me to read your wonderful scene! (Do you have more scenes like this?) :D<br /><br /><a href="http://elizabethmueller.blogspot.com/" rel="nofollow">♥.•*¨ Elizabeth ¨*•.♥</a>Elizabeth Muellerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06028099814857743134noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4954305973478053503.post-46548061058663187562011-02-15T11:06:56.911-07:002011-02-15T11:06:56.911-07:00Okay, Debbie, I don't read much romance (at al...Okay, Debbie, I don't read much romance (at all), and Twilight is the extent of my supernatural-human hook-up knowledge, so I kind of got lost after the first hyperbole. :)<br />Still, I admit it was fun to read. Thanks.<br /><a href="http://buildingcastlesonthebeach.blogspot.com" rel="nofollow">It Just Got Interesting</a>Brent Wescotthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08313269993916969201noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4954305973478053503.post-40768953045280435362011-02-15T11:03:33.491-07:002011-02-15T11:03:33.491-07:00Oooo, steamy! Nicely done.Oooo, steamy! Nicely done.Angiehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01445455787485222068noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4954305973478053503.post-89932892749315778562011-02-15T01:42:38.760-07:002011-02-15T01:42:38.760-07:00Whew...hot stuff!! Making me wish I wasn't sin...Whew...hot stuff!! Making me wish I wasn't single. Just enough beautiful description to know exactly what they are feeling without going to far. Well done!LeAnnehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00671312831056358627noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4954305973478053503.post-22815749334366376582011-02-14T23:40:43.852-07:002011-02-14T23:40:43.852-07:00Hmm, where can I meet someone like her?
Fun!Hmm, where can I meet someone like her?<br />Fun!Andrew Rosenberghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09215333688753781447noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4954305973478053503.post-69238885981170493812011-02-14T22:36:46.932-07:002011-02-14T22:36:46.932-07:00this was so much fun! thanks everyone for your com...this was so much fun! thanks everyone for your comments, I really appreciate them. There was more to this scene, but I didn't know how long was too long. =0) But I had fun writing it and getting it ready. THanks Jordan for hosting!Debbie Davishttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05327044979542154619noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4954305973478053503.post-10567038310377275002011-02-14T21:07:28.113-07:002011-02-14T21:07:28.113-07:00I get the feeling that she really will turn out to...I get the feeling that she really will turn out to be his complete undoing!<br /><br />Thanks so much for participating—but your link leads straight to your blog homepage. If someone comes across the list in a week or a month, they won't be able to find your entry. Can you enter again with a link directly to your post? I can take care of the duplicates. Thanks!Jordan McCollumhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16523599384793856702noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4954305973478053503.post-64768017177987553232011-02-14T21:05:27.794-07:002011-02-14T21:05:27.794-07:00Woohoo! She has some major power over him! I liked...Woohoo! She has some major power over him! I liked the same line as Canda, too.Rebecca Blevinshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09378726097105313400noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4954305973478053503.post-49054125173154607092011-02-14T20:38:13.755-07:002011-02-14T20:38:13.755-07:00Yeah, the girl's got him right where she wants...Yeah, the girl's got him right where she wants him. Favorite line:<br />"There wasn't a need for his heightened powers of persuasion."Candahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15867282872125340556noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4954305973478053503.post-59223550273079810332011-02-14T20:25:17.896-07:002011-02-14T20:25:17.896-07:00Whew! I might have to go get me a glass of COLD wa...Whew! I might have to go get me a glass of COLD water now. Sheesh. What a kissing scene. Nicely done.Christinehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05714394723532487643noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4954305973478053503.post-40455502021399106872011-02-14T20:17:16.034-07:002011-02-14T20:17:16.034-07:00Very descriptive. Could totally feel it. Love it!!...Very descriptive. Could totally feel it. Love it!!!Karen E. Hooverhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01234771333115348739noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4954305973478053503.post-47328883675789189172011-02-14T18:28:44.886-07:002011-02-14T18:28:44.886-07:00This is Awesome!! You picked the perfect part.This is Awesome!! You picked the perfect part.Gailhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12118919082584904915noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4954305973478053503.post-10039366329161218772011-02-14T18:04:00.082-07:002011-02-14T18:04:00.082-07:00Wow terrific kissing description. Very romantic.Wow terrific kissing description. Very romantic.Rebecca Shelleyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01160905152772301120noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4954305973478053503.post-85377459967496027302011-02-14T17:09:40.149-07:002011-02-14T17:09:40.149-07:00That girl has some kiss. I like this like.
It wa...That girl has some kiss. I like this like. <br /><br />It was an unbreakable vow that with an unexpected eagerness he covenanted with himself. <br /><br />Good job, Debbie. =DRaShelle Workmanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17582252557500502186noreply@blogger.com