Yay! I am so excited, this is my very first blogfest. What better way to celebrate Valentine's Day than with a romantic scene. The theme is Love at First Sight . . . Or Not So Much hosted by Jordan McCollum, be sure to check out the other bloggers participating by clicking HERE I am going to take it from part of a scene from my WIP when Kieryn and Aric just as bit after they meet for the first time. It's in Aric's point of view. I hope you like it!
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Aric could no longer resist her and took a step forward, closer to Kieryn, holding her trusting gaze with his. The warmth of her body radiated off her as he drew nearer to her. He relished it, allowing it to warm him. It had been a very long time since he last felt anything close to it.
There wasn't a need for his heightened powers of persuasion. As he lowered his head slowly keeping her eyes locked with his, fascinated by their ever shifting change of colors, he came closer still. Gently, carefully, he pressed his lips to hers, and closed his eyes.
An electric shock coursed through him. Never in his entire existence as a mortal or immortal had he ever experienced anything like it. It filled him with life and light renewing him. The taste of her lips was more than he could ever have imagined. Sweeter, more delicious than he had anticipated. The kiss was just as enticing as the blood racing through her veins. He was instantly addicted. He wanted more. He deepened the kiss, pressing his lips more firmly on hers and held her body close to his. Her warmth radiated out to him, penetrating his clothes, alleviating the emptiness inside him as nothing else had in over a century of imprisonment, or even before that. He knew the minute she responded, melting into his arms. The echo of her surrender flooded his thoughts through the link they now shared.
He was confused by the immediate and violent possessive reaction surging through him with regard to the girl in his arms. No one but me will ever have her! He emphatically determined. It was an unbreakable vow that with an unexpected eagerness he covenanted with himself. It was imperative that he keep her safeguarded at all costs. He assigned himself as her sentinel and would always watch over her, protect her. In order to ensure her safety he would move heaven and earth if he needed to.
The sweet ambrosia that was her kiss swirled in endless delight inside him, every sense filled to overload with its pure enticement. It was hard to believe how she threatened to overwhelm him with her essence, to be his complete undoing. Nothing, no experience in his life had prepared him for her.
19 comments:
That girl has some kiss. I like this like.
It was an unbreakable vow that with an unexpected eagerness he covenanted with himself.
Good job, Debbie. =D
Wow terrific kissing description. Very romantic.
This is Awesome!! You picked the perfect part.
Very descriptive. Could totally feel it. Love it!!!
Whew! I might have to go get me a glass of COLD water now. Sheesh. What a kissing scene. Nicely done.
Yeah, the girl's got him right where she wants him. Favorite line:
"There wasn't a need for his heightened powers of persuasion."
Woohoo! She has some major power over him! I liked the same line as Canda, too.
I get the feeling that she really will turn out to be his complete undoing!
Thanks so much for participating—but your link leads straight to your blog homepage. If someone comes across the list in a week or a month, they won't be able to find your entry. Can you enter again with a link directly to your post? I can take care of the duplicates. Thanks!
this was so much fun! thanks everyone for your comments, I really appreciate them. There was more to this scene, but I didn't know how long was too long. =0) But I had fun writing it and getting it ready. THanks Jordan for hosting!
Hmm, where can I meet someone like her?
Fun!
Whew...hot stuff!! Making me wish I wasn't single. Just enough beautiful description to know exactly what they are feeling without going to far. Well done!
Oooo, steamy! Nicely done.
Okay, Debbie, I don't read much romance (at all), and Twilight is the extent of my supernatural-human hook-up knowledge, so I kind of got lost after the first hyperbole. :)
Still, I admit it was fun to read. Thanks.
It Just Got Interesting
Whoa, great description and emotional journey he experienced! Thank you for inviting me to read your wonderful scene! (Do you have more scenes like this?) :D
♥.•*¨ Elizabeth ¨*•.♥
That's quite a kiss! I wasn't sure about the paranormal aspect at first, but the passion combined with the comment, "Never in his entire existence as a mortal or immortal had he ever experienced anything like it," promised a very interesting future for the two of them. Thanks for taking part in the blogfest. It's been fun, hasn't it?
Carol Garvin
Hey, Debbie! I have an award for you! :)
Way to go, Debbie! I agree with Canda--that was my favorite line, too; makes me believe that we, mortals, can feel the same kind of passion--w/o superhuman traits!
Well done!
Hey Debbie!
I really liked this! His sense of surprise, the heightening emotion, the possession she causes in him. It makes me want to read on and see how this passion binds him, changes him.
If I were to make suggestions, I would say to find all the sentences that say "was" and change them. They take me out of the immediacy of the action for a bit. A few is fine, but so many starts to feel heavy. Try that and see how it reads. Good job!
Love love LOVED this, Debbie! These were my personal favorite lines:
He deepened the kiss, pressing his lips more firmly on hers and held her body close to his. Her warmth radiated out to him, penetrating his clothes, alleviating the emptiness inside him as nothing else had in over a century of imprisonment, or even before that.
You went for more than just the physical, into the kind of emotion that grabs my heart as she "alleviat[ed] the emptiness inside him..."
Wow! Yeah, this is my kind of kiss. ;-)
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